My Movies Intro

[Pufulet]

Well i have been working with MiF for quite a bit and we finally got a good intro. He is still working on small things but this is how its going to look.

Edited May 28, 2010 by Pufulet

[Damien]

very cool

p.s: i got a mic now, but i can only use it when my dad isnt home.

[MiF]

Making this tookt kinda long time to make, but now i have learned lots of things, and its great fun to make videos with other guys .

[CyriusG]

Looks great.

[Mr. Darkness]

looks epic.

I like the intro

[EmRA]

Could be a bit more fastpaced imo.

Otherwise cool tho.

[Lemon!]

More fastpaced, the flash light dropped the score by abit, also, why was the playermodel too a Zombine?

Othwrise, was decent, you can improve.

[Dr. Pannenkoek]

IMO:

Bad Tings

Make it slightly shorter 8-10 seconds

The Pufulet bit should only be about 4 seconds

Change the playermodel

Good Tings

I like that font

Very good opening

So my criticism is that if it is too long, people might just fast forward it to the start of the movie which you publish. Meaning they won't see your glorius name.

Edited May 28, 2010 by Burn

[Notte]

New playermodel, remove the click sound at 00:05 and remove the flash light

[MiF]

hmmh...

Changing model: not an option.

more faster: nope, but pufulet part can be shorter

remove "click" sound: i dont see problem on that.

Flashlight off: why off? no light bugs or anything, fits on darkeness at my personal opinion.

also, this isnt fully ready yet, so thanks about negative comments for tips, how to make.

[MiF]

So my criticism is that if it is too long, people might just fast forward it to the start of the movie which you publish. Meaning they won't see your glorius name.

true, but if you have something intresting in it (like video of game), i think ppl watch it to until some text apears.

offtopic: sry double post :S

Edited May 28, 2010 by MiF

[Notte]

hmmh...

Changing model: not an option.

more faster: nope, but pufulet part can be shorter

remove "click" sound: i dont see problem on that.

Flashlight off: why off? no light bugs or anything, fits on darkeness at my personal opinion.

also, this isnt fully ready yet, so thanks about negative comments for tips, how to make.

These are the things that separates "GOOD" from " OK, its nice"

Its called details.

Like this

[Lemon!]

hmmh...

Changing model: not an option.

more faster: nope, but pufulet part can be shorter

remove "click" sound: i dont see problem on that.

Flashlight off: why off? no light bugs or anything, fits on darkeness at my personal opinion.

also, this isnt fully ready yet, so thanks about negative comments for tips, how to make.

Changing model; It's must. You can't have another zombine running around with a RL, unless it has something like "THOSE GUISE ARE BRAINLESS BUT I HAVE BRAINS AND I SHOOT THEY"

Flashlight; It looks ugly and it points directly at the ground, remove it, it's ugly and ruins it.

also, this isnt fully ready yet, so thanks about negative comments for tips, how to make.

It's called critism.

And no need to go all like "fuck you" Because you are learning, and you'll learn what will be better, instead of denying everything.

If you just keep denying, don't do any intros at all, people try to help you improve.

Edited May 28, 2010 by Lemon!

[Pufulet]

just came back from school and looked at comments. I think telling what are the bad things can be ok because it will improve it, as long as you dont do it all the way and say good things about it aswell. The Zombine was chosen because Pufulet is a Zombine. I told MiF that the Pufulet is too long. I to think the flashlight looks abit funny, but in a way it was required to see the damn zombine... kept missing him after 10 tries X))

[MiF]

just came back from school and looked at comments. I think telling what are the bad things can be ok because it will improve it, as long as you dont do it all the way and say good things about it aswell. The Zombine was chosen because Pufulet is a Zombine. I told MiF that the Pufulet is too long. I to think the flashlight looks abit funny, but in a way it was required to see the damn zombine... kept missing him after 10 tries X))

People dont know what a pain is to video, where is video from gmod (acting) when you have tried it like three times. Also actor with anyoing littlebrother, who keeps coming to computer all the time... huh! Also my Fraps started to play with me, and Gmod console joined in, and they didnt record... :X. But it was fun to make this.

I thank you all for critics and comments of anykind, i dont meant to be offensive at any momment.

[QTesla]

Change player model, Turn off flash light and make the pufulet films bit a little shorter.

[Pufulet]

MiF shortened the pufulet intro and added a small effect at the end!

[Lemon!]

Remove the flashlight.

Also, I could try to re-do that, too bad I don't have zombines.

Edited May 29, 2010 by Lemon!

[Albzi]

remove flashlight is a must.

[Lemon!]

Also, you can try to make a cinematic one.

Wait a second, I'll give you a tool that is very useful.

Catmull -Rom Cinematic Camera.

Edited May 29, 2010 by Lemon!

[CyriusG]

Like Alex and Lemon said, remove the flashlight.